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I may go a little overboard with my comment but I was stunned by both comics!
My initial reaction while seeing these two comics:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GHQ6ba-n12E In all seriousness though, sweet mercy alive this was way more than I ever would have expected and it is awesome
Now for me to say what I see that I liked ^^ Unlike a majority of people, I'm kind of an oddball when it comes to red noses. I do like the lighter shade of red or pink you drew here
, but red noses in general can sometimes be too red to me. I dunno XD
Anyway, your main comic you drew first is something I loved seeing. I have not yet played Undertale, but I can imagine her reading a book to Frisk and immediately the first thing I noticed is how improved you got from your first time drawing Toriel awhile ago. This sneezing comic has a sweet feel all around, a natural and honestly cute scenario where a sweet kind caring lady just wants to read to a kid but her nose tickles and man it results into a really surprising sneeze! What a tickle!
I love how her eyebrows are drawn in the middle top panel. The way how one nostril is clearly the one that had the tickle get into first was a surprise to see but I loved it
I think this pre-sneeze middle top panel is my favorite panel out of both comics ^^
The very next panel has the tickle spread in her nose, now entering both nostrils. The tickle I can see grows into a tease, and goat-mom tries to get her sneezy nose under control but it fights back. One detail I notice is how her book is open but in this third panel she closes it, almost like she knows she is losing the battle against the tease in her nose. The way how you drew her mouth and her hands in this panel is amazing to me. I love this image and the eyes also show just how sneezy she is becoming. The dialogue she says as her itchy nose gets more and more over the edge is adorable
The first sneeze itself seemed to overpower even her expectations. Even the way the letters are written look overpowering and the spelling itself caught my attention. Both feminine and really strong spelling for a sneeze
The size difference the letters have as well as a different color create a fun effect to see
One of my favorite details with her sneeze expression is how her ears moved and her eyes were drawn. Also, I failed to mention this earlier, but Toriel+reading glasses = Sweet as can be
The shift in color with her pre-sneeze second build was a cool little detail. It is as if her voice tone changed, and with the book flung out of the way, she just doesn't care and lets loose her strong sneeze directly in front of her. What caused the tickle in the first place? If the bonus page is related at all to this first one, the evil flower is the mastermind culprit
The second sneeze itself has a great front view angle. Great job with her clothing design here and I like the different angles you gave her sneezes.
Now for the second comic. This was a great surprise ^^ I think the shading in this comic looks very nice, and like how I did the first one, I'll be briefer but go over what I see with each part
The first panel has her eyes and eyebrows immediately picking up something is off. My favorite details with this are how her body and clothing are drawn. She just looks so sweet and beautiful at the same time! Great little detail of how her muzzle has lines added as her hand presses against the front part of her muzzle. All throughout this second comic a detail I see was how her horns are drawn in slightly different positions with each panel.
The second panel has a really great overall body pre-sneeze position. It's as if I can literally see the tickle sparking the smaller starting hitching breaths. How you drew her eyes like this look great
Great hands in this panel too.
The third panel has a chest heaving hitch that looks strong just by her body alone, let alone the great way her open mouth shows the strong hitching expression. I love how the speech bubble connects this hitch with the sneeze itself, as if the sneeze immediately followed instead of like in the first comic how she tried to not sneeze immediately because of Frisk and the book. In this second comic she had no reason to keep from sneezing.
The sneezing panel to me looks nice to me with how she leaned and how her ears moved like that, but my attention was stolen by the guest star of the comic XDD Flowey literally made me grin. His dialogue and how you used the game sprite but also did your own style for him was awesome to see! I think the light shade of red looks cute on Toriel, and man her sweetness on her expression is amazing
I think using the white game text for her sniffs was a brilliant little detail. It makes this entire second comic feel like this was a part of the game, seeing the game's text used that way.
Seriously, I really enjoyed both of these comics a lot
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