(NEW REVISION!) Dahlia Mist (OC, F) + revision I made (Messy, still OC, still F)

[1234]

Sometime ago, Soda shared this pretty thing on the Artwork Index.

This is the OC Dahlia Mist, who's half-batpony. There's a couple other pics of her on Derpibooru. She's a pretty cute OC, in my opinion. All those pics originally come from askamberfawn.tumblr.com.

The current owner of this OC made her a (short-lived) ask blog on Tumblr: ask-dahlia-mist.tumblr.com (Only now, in 2021, have I discovered this. This was in 2018. How did I miss that... XD)
ETA: They came back to make a few posts in November 2021.

Back to the sneeze thing, I decided to color it, and added my own touch to it. You'll understand once you see it. ^^' Unless, y'know, that five-letter word in the thread title gave you a hint.

I already shared it via PM with Soda and APD, and thought I'd share it here as well. DO NOT POST ANYWHERE ELSE! DX And be sure to comment about the original too. Let's be respectful to the original artist, eh?

Here's the thing.

Also, a version with just the colors.

And also, MY FIRST TOPIC! After almost 17 months on this forum. XDD

(EDIT July 20th, 2021)
What do we have here?... REVISION 2.0!

[MasterXtreme]

Really nice job on this edit! Dare I say, it looks better then the actual pic.   Both are stellar, but yours has some extra... OOOHMPH in it.  Nice on closing the eyes too. 

Seriously?  This is your first forum topic?  I find that hard to believe and crazy!  Congrats!

[1234]

Closed the eyes cuz I wanted her reaction in the last panel to change from "OMG I skree'd when I sneezed" to "OMG I made a mess".

Thanks, MasterX.

[Miggs]

Ayyy this is pretty damn neat! I love the little quote at the end where she's asking for a tissue c:

[Anyponedrawn]

DUDE!  Major props on this!  It looks awesome!  The artist did a wonderful job, great expressions, cute character.  The edit is super, not only because I love the mess, but it all FLOWS so naturally.   Really terrific job!

[Soda]

I like the revised version better then the original!  It is absolutely delicious that mess squirting out!   Great drawing originally with awesome expressions, nice buildup and sneeze.  

[1234]

Man, I don't know if I should feel good, hearing that I've done a great job on the edit, or if I should feel bad cuz people like it better than the original. Pffhaha! XD

They're a great artist, yeah. They drew that sneeze so well.

[Anyponedrawn]

They did an awesome job!  Let me make that super clear.  For a non fetishist, they did almost everything we could possibly want!  Spray is optional too, so in reality, they did everything they were supposed to do and excelled at it.

You just took it to a whole new level with the fetish touch.

[1234]

Yeah, that's kinda what I wanted to do. "Fetishize" it. There was nothing but a tiny bit of spray, and with such a beautiful pic, I had to fetishize it.

FETISHIZE EVERYTHING!

#wut

Srsly, thanks, APD.

[Soda]

^ I think APD said it nicely.   I like what he said.

[Captain Ridiculous]

You did a wicked good job on that revision!  If you were going to ask me which was the original, I probably wouldn't have known!  You did a really nice job, 1234.

[1234]

A detail I wanna share: I solely used Microsoft Paint for the coloring and editing.

[RainySunshine]

A detail I wanna share: I solely used Microsoft Paint for the coloring and editing.

No, no.  Hide that!  Hide that!  Don't take away the glory of us romanticizing how you did this!

Seriously though, it turned out really good, Numbers!  I am really happy you shared this with us, because you did a fine job!  The artist themselves did a stupendous job with this character, great expressions, etc.  You upped it with a really nice revision.  You added a personal touch to it, and it is really great.

[Wolfwood]

Hold the phones!  You did this brilliant revision?!  Dude, you did great!  Really good job, Numbers!  I like how you think, because I would have done the same thing... except mine would have looked like a three year old did it. 

Might have somehow ended up looking like a elephant wearing a fire hydrant costume on a unicycle!

Seriously, great job and nice, tasteful changes.

[Silverwing]

The original one is really good.  They checked all the right boxes, except I would love a little more spray... hey, whats his, a revisited and updated picture? Wow! I'm blown away by artisanship and the amount of lovely juices!  I like her eyes closed and wow!  Who did this?  Was it someone like APD... or some other artist?  WHAT?  Numbers did this?  OUR NUMBERS?!  No way! 

YES WAY!  You did a stellar job on this revisited revision.   I think you took a great comic and made it greater, and rarely do I say that about revisions!  Love the coloring too.  You and Blurr are great revisionists!